Child Slavery

Overall, there were a lot of things that could have been done to improve my paper. I think one of the most important mistakes that I made when writing this paper was not being able to find sources for the counter view. I searched many sites and articles for the view that child slavery could be considered right, but never came up with anywhere that said so. I found a few lines in one of my sources, but for the most part I supplemented the view with ideas of my own making. I realized that culture and the economy were some very important things to consider and included them. Then, the next issue is that I don’t think that I put enough time into the paper. I researched quite well I think, but did not incorporate these sources as well as I should have into the paper. I had multiple sources in the paper but I think that I focused mainly on one or two instead of spreading the “love” and including more quotes and knowledge from my other sources. When my paper is revised, I plan to include more quotes from the books that I used instead of quotes that come mainly from my scholarly sources. After these things, the structure of my paper could have been done better. I am planning on including subtitles for each paragraph and editing them so that the paper is less boring and flows better. Also, I probably need to include more writing that shows my own thought process instead of that of my sources.

     Even if my paper had some weak points, I think that there is one thing that I did well. I defended the viewpoint that child slavery is bad through testimonies, evidence, and ideas from organizations. I made sure to include enough information from these sources to adequately defend my view that child slavery is bad.