Faith in my Rough Draft

For everyone their first draft is not their best work, and neither was mine. After my meeting with the writing center I had to make some major changes to my argument paper. In my paper I was arguing that Darwinism and Creationism could coexist as one theory instead of contradicting each other the way most people think when they think of the two theories. One of the problems I had when arguing my paper was that I used most of my paper to point out the holes in the two theories instead of comparing the two; which was the main objective for writing my paper. It was also difficult for me to organize my argument and let it flow because I pretty much tried to talk about both topics at the same time. This also made it difficult for me to come up with the minimum number of words I needed for this paper.

 My advice from the writing center was to briefly write about the two theories and then write about the different topics I have in multiple paragraphs so I organize them better and make the topics flow easier. The writing center also gave me information that I could research on that could make comparing the two theories in my argument easier. This will help my argument because pointing out holes in the two theories will not convince my audience to accept them as one instead of contradicting the two.  Another problem in my rough draft was my thesis. Instead of making a solid claim my thesis kind of suggested a weak generalization and was not at the end of my introductory paragraph. My visit to the writing center helped me come up with a stronger thesis and helped me come up with a solid claim, and putting my thesis at the end of my introduction paragraph helped strengthen my claim.