Ways to Clean Up My Paper

Overall, I am satisfied with my research paper on the Stop Online Piracy Act. In my paper, I argue that SOPA is an ineffective way to combat online piracy. The main argument that I made, was that SOPA has a high potential for abuse in that material is unnecessarily censored and that the functionality of the internet would be harmed. The strongest point in my paper was that SOPA harms the functionality of the internet. In this section of my paper, I explain how SOPA could disrupt the online economy. I present my own opinions on the matter and use evidence that shows how SOPA would cause more harm than good.

While this section of my paper was very balanced with discussion and evidence other parts of my paper had too much evidence or not enough. When discussing how SOPA censors content, I relied heavily upon evidence that shows how SOPA censors information. While I discuss this issue, I do not go as in depth as I probably should have. This resulted in there being too much information and not enough discussion. On the other hand in some parts of my paper I began arguments but never provided enough evidence baking up my claims. When discussing the copyright industry I make assumptions about their positions on SOPA without offering enough supporting evidence.

Instead of simply restating another sources argument, I felt that I did an adequate job analyzing sources and presenting my own arguments. While I did need to use sources to give my arguments validity, I relied mostly on my own ideas. In some parts of my essay this is very evident, but in other parts I believe it is less notable. This is because in order to discuss SOPA, I had to explain the different aspects of the bill first. As a result some parts of the paper contain too much information. To fix this, I believe I need to work on integrating information into my paper better so that it is more dispersed. This will help make my own ideas stand out, which will make my paper appear more argumentative.